Pegasus Fleet Forums

http://wiki.pegasusfleet.net/index.php? ... e_Specific
http://wiki.pegasusfleet.net/index.php? ... e_-_Organs
http://wiki.pegasusfleet.net/index.php? ... se_-_Bones
http://wiki.pegasusfleet.net/index.php? ... _-_General
http://wiki.pegasusfleet.net/index.php? ... Conditions
http://wiki.pegasusfleet.net/index.php? ... _Equipment

Did I dumb it down enough?

For the specific race page - I think some of the larger paragraph's should be broken down into two or three paragraphs to make it a little easier to read. (Personal Preference)

For the Disease Pages - You should include names of people who have been, died from, or are currently affected by each disease if you can find names of people for the disease (I know not every disease has an example)

The other two pages I skimmed, but I am sure they could use something extra too.

I agree with you on the race page, however for the disease pages, I didn't want to copy too much from Mem Alpha and Beta. As it stands right now, half of it is from them and half of it is from me. I'd rather not out and out copy everything they have.

The other two pages, no idea other than pictures for the medical equipment page.

You could make up people.

....I'm not sure why. I mean, I'm not just dismissing it because I think it's stupid or anything, but I'm unsure of why make up people to give an example of patients. Examples that players can't 'look' at.

This will definetely serve as a valuable resource for the Academy.

Thank you for your hard work.

Pictures on the medical equipment page might be useful, I think. Maybe where available pictures of individuals suffering from the diseases on the diseases page as well?

Pictures are now on the Medical Equipment page, but still hesitant about the diseases pages simply for copyright issues.